Don’t give up, just get better. There was poor plot development and your use of colloquialisms and slang greatly detracted from your story development. Porn 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-10-24 17:25:37I don’t know who’s talking there’s like three or four people talking and I don’t know who’s whoAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:47:00He even said Yo… Your “Choppy” way of writing with short incomplete sentences is almost impossible for the reader to follow a coherent story line or thought process. Dude is MEXICANFbaileyReport 2010-06-16 23:42:35Great story keep it goingThe EditorReport 2010-06-16 19:01:33Sorry, but I couldn’t finish reading this “Supposed” story, it was just to difficult to read and understand. at the beginningAnonymous readerReport 2010-06-17 08:45:45Guys l know why. …
