You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me. XXX now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. kucch bhi likhata.anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 00:44:14yo ho hoe yes no maybe so«1» but I really enjoyed your story, and your ideas. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale.
