4 comments«1»READERReport 2006-06-06 21:31:00your writing is pretty good, however i think the sex itself could be better. Xxx video maybe more descriptive its too dry.READERReport 2006-05-18 02:41:16Thank you for your comments. 4 comments«1»READERReport 2006-06-06 21:31:00your writing is pretty good, however i think the sex itself could be better. 4 comments«1»READERReport 2006-06-06 21:31:00your writing is pretty good, however i think the sex itself could be better. keep fucking writingREADERReport 2006-05-16 10:44:44it was sweet i would like it to be contiued maybe the dad should catch them«1» I really appreciate the feed back, if there is any one who has some ideas on how to help me improve my writing technique, please feel free to tell me.READERReport 2006-05-17 01:13:31lol alright dude.. maybe more descriptive its too dry.READERReport 2006-05-18 02:41:16Thank you for your comments.
