You just kinda rushed the whole begining. You just kinda rushed the whole begining. Porn You should have described his home where they were. This is a Great beginning to a series. the two main characters have no real relationship or reason for why he feels so drawn to her aside from her lookanonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 21:25:12I laughed when I esas the opening line. Thanks«1» Thanks You for timing this further. Thanks You for timing this further. 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-01 03:42:15When you prepare version 3 do you think you could put in the necessary capital letters and punctuation?anonymous readerReport 2012-09-30 22:10:46it was really good until you introduced the demon. You should have described his home where they were. Thanks«1» This is a Great beginning to a series. Thanks«1» This is a Great beginning
