I was basically on long paragraph. Free porn Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your own stories before posting, I suggest reading them out loud to yourself, as this will reveal a large percentage of your mistakes. At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. Idea of the story is great hopefully you have more ideas similar to this and you proofread and fix your future works before posting them. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. 4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when
